Dear Fevernova and 2002 World cup.
In 2002 when I was only elementary school children, you came out to the world. You were official soccer ball for the world cup. There were official ball for world cups after 1978 world cup. Especially, however, you were unique to me, because you were the soccer ball for world cup that held in Korea and Japan in 2002. Personally, When you came out to the world, you attract me to the world of soccer. I was attracted by your color and design(According to the Adidas which made Fevernova, design was motivated by the Asia's beauty and enthusiastic energy.).
Your color was slightly gold and it looked like you are shining.
How fancy it is!
Hopefully, my father bought you for my birthday present, and I usually played with you. (Since I was too young to go outside and play “real” soccer with friends, I just kicked it in the backyard.) After this birthday present, I became a big fan of soccer and other clubs. Also you led me to enjoy soccer itself.
Not only you gave me personal impression, you looked very nice at the official cup games. In 2002 World cup, there were many star players such as Ronaldo, Pigou, Zidane. (Most of them now retired.) Although they are famous and superior players they cannot show us skills without you. Without balls, they cannot show us fantastic dribble and shoots. In other words, you were the most important character in the world cup. With your bright skin, you were always with the brilliant players of the world. In addition, you were always at the most glorious time in the soccer match, goal.
I was amazed by you and players fantastic passing game. In addition, in the world cup, our country’s soccer team achieved semi-final also. Maybe, it will be the other reason that I can remember you well. Thanks, without you, I was not able to enjoy the soccer match.
However, I do not think your role was limited in the stadium. In fact, your real achievement was accomplished outside of stadium.
“Cooperation” You would know the World cup in 2002 was held between both Korea and Japan.
In the 20th century, historically, Korea and Japan shared dark and sad history. There were conflicts between Korea and Japan, and Korea had been colonized by Japan for 36 years. Can you imagine what this means? Most of Korean did not think Japan was a nice country. Although Korea and Japan economically cooperated for some area, both countries’ citizens did not understand each other well.
However, you and your World cup gave both citizens a chance.
First you were made by both Korean and Japanese sports scientist, also the opening ceremony was held in Seoul, Korea and the final was held in Tokyo, Japan. Through the cooperation between both countries for World cup, we (both Koreans and Japanese) were able to start understanding toward each other. Past history for both countries was history of conflict. However, with you and World cup, and by managing world cup together Korea and Japan was able to open new era with cooperation.
For me, you were the greatest soccer ball that ever existed. Although there were other soccer balls in 2006 and 2010. You will be remembered as the best.
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답글삭제Hi Joohyung,
답글삭제I really like your choice of topic here. Interesting, unique, and personal. I can easily imagine you watching the games and hugging this ball like a teddy bear.
You'll notice above that I made a lot of changes. Your intro was a jumbled mess, to be honest, and my general sense from your writing is that it's good, but needs to oversome a few minor things to excel.
You repeat the same clauses and nouns a lot, and need to work on flow. Instead of writing two short sentences that contain the same subject noun, combine them into one sentence and omit the repetition. This will make for a smoother read.
I don't get the sense that you spent a great deal of time checking over your work to find minor grammatical issues, so try and check and double check before you post.
I love the pictures and you formatted this well. I think you could have been more daring and poetic and added some more flare to your writing. Describe the ball and the field and the game itself with more description and metaphor and simile. Track the changes I made, and you will discover a few adjectives and descriptions I added.
All in all, a decent way to start your writing semester.
Ode to Fevernova,
답글삭제In 2002, when I was only an elementary school child, you came out to the world as the official soccer ball of the 2002 World Cup. There were many before you, dating back to 1978, but you were unique to me. Kicked and bounced across glorious turf in Korea and Japan, you attracted me to the world of soccer with your color and design. According to Adidas, your creator, your design was motivated by Asia's beauty and energy. Slightly gold and shining, you're like a heavenly orb or light.
How fancy you are!
Thankfully, my father bought you as my birthday present, and we spent hours playing together. Since I was too young to go outside and play “real” soccer with friends, I just kicked you in the backyard. After this birthday present, I became a big fan of soccer and other clubs, and finally you led me to enjoy the game of soccer itself.
Not only did you give me a personal impression, but you looked resplendent at the official cup games. In the 2002 World cup, there were many star players such as Ronaldo, Pigou, and Zidane - most of them now retired gods of the game. Although they are famous and superior players, they cannot show us their brilliant skills without you. Without balls, they cannot show us fantastic dribbling and explosive shots. In other words, you were the most important figure in the world cup. With your bright skin, you were always dancing with the brilliant players of the world. In addition, you were always there at the most glorious moment of the match: the goal!
I was amazed by you and the fantastic passing game of the players. In the world cup, our humble nation, Korea, advanced to the semi-final. Maybe, it will be the other reason that I can remember you well. Without you, I wouldn't have been able to enjoy the soccer match.
However, I do not think your role is limited in the stadium. In fact, your real achievement was accomplished outside the stadium.
"Cooperation.” You would know the World Cup in 2002 was held between both Korea and Japan.
In the 20th century, historically, Korea and Japan shared a dark and sad history. There were conflicts between Korea and Japan, and Korea had been colonized by Japan for 36 years. Can you imagine what this means? Most Koreans did not think Japan was a nice country. Although Korea and Japan economically cooperated for this massive event, both countries’citizens did not understand each other well.
However, you and your World Cup gave both citizens a chance. First, you were made by both Korean and Japanese sports scientists, also the opening ceremony was held in Seoul, and the final was held in Tokyo. Through the cooperation between both countries of the World Cup, we (both Koreans and Japanese) were able to start understanding each other. The history of conflict gave way to a new era of cooperation.
For me, you were the greatest soccer ball that ever existed. Although there were other soccer balls in 2006 and 2010, you will be remembered as the best.
2011년 2월 21일 오후 9:52